So on the one hand, Isaac's annoying but on the other, he's realistic, I think. There are plenty of 14 year old boys who run around, make noise and have no respect for other people. I used to know boys like Isaac, maybe used to be one. But what I'm not getting across is Isaac's potential, his good qualities. On my next writing pass, I want to work on him more, really dig deep and improve his, and other people's, characterization.
Otherwise, there are some rough spots but it feels better now after reading it aloud and correcting grammar and dialog. The dwarves the boys and Jael meet speak in archaic, 17th century English. I didn't want to do real dialect or accents, that always feels false and forced but the archaic speech works. I particularly like the dwarven leader, but I'll need to change his name tonight. I modeled him a bit on Brian Blessed (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Brian_Blessed), who is the world's tallest, loudest dwarf as it is.
Tonight I'm going to a movie but I'll try to get chapter 10 done anyway.