I'll see what the feedback is on chapter 2 and 3. I'd like to compress things a little more but I'm concerned that if I do that, there will be too much information in too short a span. A novel does need space to breathe. To, as Jael does in Chapter 4, smell the flowers. It doesn't move the plot forward but I do like those moments in chapter 4 where Jael is seeing the world from ground-level for the first time. I may put more of that in chapter 2. I need to show Jael's internal loneliness early.
Nancy Kress had some good advice about that in her book 'Beginnings, Middles and Ends'. To have a character change, we need to show the capacity and impetuous to change well before the turning point/event. Jacob's changes are easier, maybe because he's more relatable, I think it's Jael I need to keep on polishing and honing.
Well, I'll keep on with the copy edit pass. Reading aloud does help catch problems. Chapter 4 was refreshingly light on typos and language issues. In fact, I think it's my favorite chapter since chapter 1, I'm almost tempted to jump from 1 to 4 but we'll examine that later.