Speaking of, I am trying to decide if I should try delicate surgery on chapter 2 or if I should just gut it and start from scratch, basically. In Smooth Running, too much tinkering made the scenes sound choppy. I had to completely re-write my beginning chapters to make them sound connected and nautural. I have a feeling I'm going to have to do that with Chapter 2, 3, 4, and probably half of 5. Oh well, it'll be worth it. I just need to put my head down and do it.
I'll try surgery first, though. If that doesn't work, I'll have to bust out the literary chainsaw and build it again. Whether it's a scalpel or power tools, I think the fourth draft is going to read much better. I have some good ideas about how to telegraph the threat to Jael, earlier. I think it's cheesy but I guess people like cheese. I don't know. I liked the slow exploration of the world and the characters. I liked that the urgent need to flee the farm came from an innocent trip to town. But I guess attention spans, even of readers, have dropped. They want plot and action up front. Rabble.