Ah, chapter 15: sweet, sweet action. I like writing action scenes. I think that's one of the things I like best about writing about Smooth Charles' stories. This book, Angel Odyssey, has fewer action scenes. I kinda miss that. I'll need to make sure all my fight scenes in this book count as much as this one does.
After several introspective chapters, we're finally at a big fight. Jael, Jacob and new arrival Balt fight a pack of brunes. What are brunes? Well, they're magically modified beasts. They have more than animal intelligence and real malevolence. I envisioned them as black bears that fight like pack animals, like wolves. They don't have great vision but their hearing and sense of smell are very acute. They're the product of a Sorcerer's experiment, but not the Sorcerer chasing Jael and Jacob. (Abrax isn't nearly that evil, just evil enough, if that makes sense)
There is a lot of emotion and description of being run to the ragged edge of exhaustion. I know what that's like, though in my case there was nothing more frightening than a staff sergeant chasing me at the time. And he didn't want to eat me, thankfully.
This is also the introduction of Balthazar, aka Balt. I wanted a 'big damn hero' moment for his intro but one where it was just possible that his arrival caused the fight Jael and Jacob wanted to avoid.
The action read well but there were more typos in this chapter than the last five chapters combined. No exaggeration. Mostly little stuff but I could tell I was writing as fast as my fingers would fly. After reading it aloud and fixing those nits, I'm even happier with the chapter. Though, conceiveably, I could split it into two shorter chapters. Again. Ah well, we'll see what an editor and test readers think about it.
After several introspective chapters, we're finally at a big fight. Jael, Jacob and new arrival Balt fight a pack of brunes. What are brunes? Well, they're magically modified beasts. They have more than animal intelligence and real malevolence. I envisioned them as black bears that fight like pack animals, like wolves. They don't have great vision but their hearing and sense of smell are very acute. They're the product of a Sorcerer's experiment, but not the Sorcerer chasing Jael and Jacob. (Abrax isn't nearly that evil, just evil enough, if that makes sense)
There is a lot of emotion and description of being run to the ragged edge of exhaustion. I know what that's like, though in my case there was nothing more frightening than a staff sergeant chasing me at the time. And he didn't want to eat me, thankfully.
This is also the introduction of Balthazar, aka Balt. I wanted a 'big damn hero' moment for his intro but one where it was just possible that his arrival caused the fight Jael and Jacob wanted to avoid.
The action read well but there were more typos in this chapter than the last five chapters combined. No exaggeration. Mostly little stuff but I could tell I was writing as fast as my fingers would fly. After reading it aloud and fixing those nits, I'm even happier with the chapter. Though, conceiveably, I could split it into two shorter chapters. Again. Ah well, we'll see what an editor and test readers think about it.
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