Chapter 17 done, well first pass. Shortly after waking I realized I made a logic mistake on one of Jael's actions but I think I know how to fix it. Jael is constrained against harming residents of the lands under her protection. Balt does not qualify for those constraints so she should be free to threaten her. I'll make a note in the draft and re-write the affected sentences later.
This was a longer chapters, over 5k words. It might be a little too long but there was some good stuff in it. Some good action,As usual, I don't know what to cut. Frankly when I do a revision pass looking for things to cut, for every sentence I do trim, I expand two more. It's usually better for the trimming revision pass...it's just not always shorter.
I also messed up my numbering. I have two chapter 17s. So I'm over 38 chapters now, I'm pretty sure. (and I'm only at chapter 17 for this second revision pass. Oy.)
I think I got across Jael's dislike of Balt...and her attraction to him. In chapter 18 I need to get those conflicting emotions into her head and let them bat her around a bit. It might also affect Jacob, due to the bond. I need to tread a fine line here. Jael is feeling a lot of emotions she's never felt before. She bonded Jacob to save her own life but it's changing it as well. She supposed to grow more and more emotional as the book goes on (but not emo, I hope). Some of this she should recognise as being as a result of the bond but the ultimate goal I have is for Jael to realize her feelings are hers. That she does in fact grow to love Jacob and not just feel a reflected infatuation coming from him. It's ambitious and I hope I pull it off.
Dinner with the gimps tonight, so no Throne of Writing (tm) for me. Too bad, I'm getting back into the writing groove again. I also have other people's stuff to read and critique. Oh, and work. Sigh. I need a vacation just so I can work on all this stuff. And then probably a vacation from my vacation.
This was a longer chapters, over 5k words. It might be a little too long but there was some good stuff in it. Some good action,As usual, I don't know what to cut. Frankly when I do a revision pass looking for things to cut, for every sentence I do trim, I expand two more. It's usually better for the trimming revision pass...it's just not always shorter.
I also messed up my numbering. I have two chapter 17s. So I'm over 38 chapters now, I'm pretty sure. (and I'm only at chapter 17 for this second revision pass. Oy.)
I think I got across Jael's dislike of Balt...and her attraction to him. In chapter 18 I need to get those conflicting emotions into her head and let them bat her around a bit. It might also affect Jacob, due to the bond. I need to tread a fine line here. Jael is feeling a lot of emotions she's never felt before. She bonded Jacob to save her own life but it's changing it as well. She supposed to grow more and more emotional as the book goes on (but not emo, I hope). Some of this she should recognise as being as a result of the bond but the ultimate goal I have is for Jael to realize her feelings are hers. That she does in fact grow to love Jacob and not just feel a reflected infatuation coming from him. It's ambitious and I hope I pull it off.
Dinner with the gimps tonight, so no Throne of Writing (tm) for me. Too bad, I'm getting back into the writing groove again. I also have other people's stuff to read and critique. Oh, and work. Sigh. I need a vacation just so I can work on all this stuff. And then probably a vacation from my vacation.
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