I wanted to put up Chapter 5 for people's review, so I ended up working on that instead of chapter 19's read-aloud pass.
Ugh. Chapter 5 is big. 6k words, once I was more or less done with it. (I ended up adding words to get it to the 6k mark....AND I was trying to trim things!) It starts out slow but there were things I wanted to say about the Wellmans, to set up the conflict between the two families.
I rewrote some passages and gave some dialog and action to Isaac. He'd been too silent in the early part of this chapter. That's not in character for him or Jacob. I also referened the limitations of the bond twice. I think this is the first place it's really appropriate to do so.... Well, maybe I could fit it in a little in chapter 4. It wouldn't fit in Chapter 2 or three too well as both characters are recovering from Jael's fall and the subsequent bonding.
Anyway, the first half of the chapter is the problematic part. I think. I was pretty happy with the second half, when they get to the Grange, so I left it as-is. May have been a mistake. Maybe I should have plugged along and worked harder on the second half of the chapter. To tell the truth, I was kinda tired after working this weekend.
We will see what people think about it.
Ugh. Chapter 5 is big. 6k words, once I was more or less done with it. (I ended up adding words to get it to the 6k mark....AND I was trying to trim things!) It starts out slow but there were things I wanted to say about the Wellmans, to set up the conflict between the two families.
I rewrote some passages and gave some dialog and action to Isaac. He'd been too silent in the early part of this chapter. That's not in character for him or Jacob. I also referened the limitations of the bond twice. I think this is the first place it's really appropriate to do so.... Well, maybe I could fit it in a little in chapter 4. It wouldn't fit in Chapter 2 or three too well as both characters are recovering from Jael's fall and the subsequent bonding.
Anyway, the first half of the chapter is the problematic part. I think. I was pretty happy with the second half, when they get to the Grange, so I left it as-is. May have been a mistake. Maybe I should have plugged along and worked harder on the second half of the chapter. To tell the truth, I was kinda tired after working this weekend.
We will see what people think about it.
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