Chapter 19 is another problematic chapter. It's 'talky', this time about the gods and Jael's feeling about them. Of course her views are by extension the views of the people living there. Not to mention Jael has her own reason to hate gods after getting maimed by one. So that's important character stuff for Jael. I also go into her fluctuating emotions, being disturbed by feelings of attraction to Balt. This is all useful stuff but other than that, nothing happens. I need to think on this chapter more.
I ended up writing a good bit, not just correcting spelling. The words just came spilling out of Jael, so I let them come. May have to let them settle and then come back and review them.
I did my first big trim/move as well. At the end of chapter 19 is a big 'bathing' scene, this time with Jael teasing both Balt and Jacob. It felt out of place after Jael was spewing out her feelings about the gods Balt keeps swearing by. I moved the swimming scene to the beginning of chapter 21 but it may just be cut entirely. I'm not sure.
To be honest, there are sections I just want to re-write entirely but for this pass, I was just trying to correct spelling and language. I desperately want to finish this second draft and begin the third, deeper revision. Maybe I should just note in the text what needs to change and move on.
Learning by doing is a long, hard process.
I ended up writing a good bit, not just correcting spelling. The words just came spilling out of Jael, so I let them come. May have to let them settle and then come back and review them.
I did my first big trim/move as well. At the end of chapter 19 is a big 'bathing' scene, this time with Jael teasing both Balt and Jacob. It felt out of place after Jael was spewing out her feelings about the gods Balt keeps swearing by. I moved the swimming scene to the beginning of chapter 21 but it may just be cut entirely. I'm not sure.
To be honest, there are sections I just want to re-write entirely but for this pass, I was just trying to correct spelling and language. I desperately want to finish this second draft and begin the third, deeper revision. Maybe I should just note in the text what needs to change and move on.
Learning by doing is a long, hard process.
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