Chapter 24, all snuggly warm and well-paced

   I ran through chapter 24 last night.  It ready pretty well, though there might be stuff I can prune from the first half of the chapter.  There's a couple of rough sentences that need polish but on the whole it worked.  This is another chapter that feels right as far as pacing.  It goes it and gets out without too much mischief.
  The scene with the Reaper caravan guards works pretty well.  Personally, I like the Storm King reference and Jacob and Jael sheltering from the storm in a haystack.  I remember what it was like to weather a big thunderstorm in my grandparents hayloft.  The warmth and smell of the hay contrasting to the booming thunder and pelting rain.  It's really a wonderful feeling to be dry and warm when it's stormy.  I hope I captured part of that feeling.  Maybe a little more polish to get there. 
  One thing I didn't have, back then, was someone to share that storm and that hay-warmth with.  I imagine it being wonderfully intimate.  Hopefully the readers will feel a little envious of Jacob, for the first time in a while, probably.  Still more tuning to do and more polishing but from this point on, I'm pretty happy with the pace of the chapters.  We'll see how they read.