I did get a second look at chapter 14. It needs help. I re-wrote the first page entirely and will probably do it again, next pass. I need to think more carefully what the chapter needs to be about. My thought that it would be a more 'internal' chapter as Jael is dealing with the prolonged proximity and Jacob's growing love/attraction to her. The more I think on it, the less I like that as an idea. I may keep some of that, her noticing Jacob's attraction and noticing him trying to control himself. I do also need to deal with Jael trying to control the emotions she's feeling. However, I need to also start signaling some kind of attraction...or, more accurately, respect for him. Jacob is still a boy but she should start seeing potential in him.
As the chapter is currently written, it's too introspective and at the same time, too talky. I can keep some of the world flavor, the wonder of this magical pocket in a larger, more mundane world. I need to keep things going, keep things happening. Some kind of threat or drama needs to happen to Jael in this chapter. So far, she's started low and just steadily gained strength throughout the story. I don't want to lose that progression but I need to make things personal, raise the stakes for her.
Food for thought.
I also need to start on a short 'baby story' for a friend from one of my writing groups. She's going to be having a baby soon and as a 'wedding shower' present, we're going to write baby stories for her little one. I need to ponder on that as well. The theme is 'on the day you were born'. I might do something about the world as it was in 2010. A snapshot of the heights we've reached. Hopefully, there are still more heights ahead of us. I don't like this feeling of...teetering I get sometimes. Ah well, forward momentum, it's not just for writers, it's for the world as well. And I don't mean that as an endorsement for the 'Progressive movement' as it's currently understood. Sometimes forward momentum means the battle for what's worth keeping. But all that is a bit much for a baby book. :)