Well, I chopped chapter 25 in half. The question is, which half to keep? If I keep both, I'm going to break my form of "one Jacob chapter, one Jael chapter"*. There have been a lot of chapters where it felt like there was a natural breaking point...and I just kept writing past it, apparently. All I can guess is that the breaking point when I'm writing and when I'm reading isn't always the same. (sometimes it is)
Chapter 25 is a good candidate for getting seriously chopped up. Not a lot 'happens' but at the same time I really need a good introspective chapter where Jael tries to get a handle on the feelings she's developing towards Jacob. Right now, she's in pretty serious denial about it. But if she's going to open her heart to him, I need to telegraph it, early. I also needed her to react to her aggressive defense of Jacob, which is against her oath and all that the Oskmey stand for.
The problem is, not a lot else happens. I put in a little swimming jeopardy to make the chapter have a moment of excitement but I can't help thinking I can do this somewhere else. A good possible candidate is the second half of chapter 25, the part that comes after the break. I'll look it over tonight.
This is the challenge. I'm writing a coming of age story of Jacob and a 'coming of humanity' story of Jael. There's a romance plot in Angel Odyssey, in fact a big part of the story that 'getting the perfect 10 to love you'. And, being worthy of that love. The thing is, love doesn't come quickly or easily. And in Jael's case, it's something that slowly grows. So I DO need to show that growing or the romance plot won't work. What I need to do is figure out how to show that without bogging down the story in emo navel-gazing.
I can do this. I just need to polish and rearrange things.
*What I'd really like is for some guidance from someone who's done this a lot to tell me if the form is good or if it's flexible. Rabble.
Chapter 25 is a good candidate for getting seriously chopped up. Not a lot 'happens' but at the same time I really need a good introspective chapter where Jael tries to get a handle on the feelings she's developing towards Jacob. Right now, she's in pretty serious denial about it. But if she's going to open her heart to him, I need to telegraph it, early. I also needed her to react to her aggressive defense of Jacob, which is against her oath and all that the Oskmey stand for.
The problem is, not a lot else happens. I put in a little swimming jeopardy to make the chapter have a moment of excitement but I can't help thinking I can do this somewhere else. A good possible candidate is the second half of chapter 25, the part that comes after the break. I'll look it over tonight.
This is the challenge. I'm writing a coming of age story of Jacob and a 'coming of humanity' story of Jael. There's a romance plot in Angel Odyssey, in fact a big part of the story that 'getting the perfect 10 to love you'. And, being worthy of that love. The thing is, love doesn't come quickly or easily. And in Jael's case, it's something that slowly grows. So I DO need to show that growing or the romance plot won't work. What I need to do is figure out how to show that without bogging down the story in emo navel-gazing.
I can do this. I just need to polish and rearrange things.
*What I'd really like is for some guidance from someone who's done this a lot to tell me if the form is good or if it's flexible. Rabble.
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