I wrestled last night for about an hour with three chapters in Angel Odyssey. I toyed with the idea of cutting them or combining them but in the end, I left them as they are. All three chapters are very short, which is where the cut or combine impulse came from. On the other hand, they were easy to read and the POV insights weren’t bad. The story is ticking along, I feel, at this point. So…I’ll leave it in until someone paying me says to change or cut them. Easy to say, soon the problem will be finding someone to buy said book. But that’s a little ways away.
I’m cutting out a lot of internal dialog, I find. Most of the time, I’m showing what needs to be said. The internal dialog is just hitting people over the head and, yes, sometimes it even comes out a bit whiny. I’m a little concerned that Jacob and Jael are coming off a little two dimensional. I can write well-rounded characters so I’m puzzled what the problem is (if there even is a problem, I may be imagining things). I’m hoping that cutting down the internal dialog and varying thoughts and actions more will help. I don’t know. I’m starting to worry that this draft won’t be my last draft to get it out the door. Maybe I need to pony up the serious dough to hire a content editor. I hope not but I’m starting to wonder…
Luckily I spent April writing short stories, so I’m still getting my fix of rejection from editors and I have lots of stuff for my critique group to poke holes in. Still, we keep moving forward.
I’m cutting out a lot of internal dialog, I find. Most of the time, I’m showing what needs to be said. The internal dialog is just hitting people over the head and, yes, sometimes it even comes out a bit whiny. I’m a little concerned that Jacob and Jael are coming off a little two dimensional. I can write well-rounded characters so I’m puzzled what the problem is (if there even is a problem, I may be imagining things). I’m hoping that cutting down the internal dialog and varying thoughts and actions more will help. I don’t know. I’m starting to worry that this draft won’t be my last draft to get it out the door. Maybe I need to pony up the serious dough to hire a content editor. I hope not but I’m starting to wonder…
Luckily I spent April writing short stories, so I’m still getting my fix of rejection from editors and I have lots of stuff for my critique group to poke holes in. Still, we keep moving forward.
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