More good progress last night, despite the brevity of the session. I'm being nudged into getting involved in our church men's ministry. I don't know if I'll have time for it and the novel writing, but I thought I'd try to do both.
Jael had to confront her memories of fighting and falling. It's my first flashback and hopefully it doesn't outstay it's welcome. Rather than going into a tight third person narrative of what happened, I described what happened. Half show and half tell. We'll see if it works.
Flashbacks in a tight third person can jar a reader out of time and space. I didn't want to lose Jael's mood of regret, guilt and sorrow. She is broken, in ways even she doesn't realize right now. She really does need Jacob and for more than just someone to lean on and lend her life force.
Related to that, Jael got her spear back. An Oskmey's spear is both a magical weapon and a symbol of her power and function. There are some obvious Freudian symbolisms as well with Jacob climbing a tree to get her spear back for her. I don't want to lay that on too heavily, but there is a certain significance to an Oskmey allowing someone to touch her spear. Oy. Just writing that down makes it sound much less subtle than I'm trying to be. For once.
Jael had to confront her memories of fighting and falling. It's my first flashback and hopefully it doesn't outstay it's welcome. Rather than going into a tight third person narrative of what happened, I described what happened. Half show and half tell. We'll see if it works.
Flashbacks in a tight third person can jar a reader out of time and space. I didn't want to lose Jael's mood of regret, guilt and sorrow. She is broken, in ways even she doesn't realize right now. She really does need Jacob and for more than just someone to lean on and lend her life force.
Related to that, Jael got her spear back. An Oskmey's spear is both a magical weapon and a symbol of her power and function. There are some obvious Freudian symbolisms as well with Jacob climbing a tree to get her spear back for her. I don't want to lay that on too heavily, but there is a certain significance to an Oskmey allowing someone to touch her spear. Oy. Just writing that down makes it sound much less subtle than I'm trying to be. For once.
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